Monday, March 11, 2013

My short story

Authors Notes: 
1) I would like the reader to never give up on what you really want. 
2) The whole thing was easy to write. 
3) It wasn't that hard, but i kept losing my train of thought. 
4) I don't really know but just comment what you liked :)



           My story starts off at this kids house, he is very unhappy you might say. This kids name is Jason, Jason’s life has always been very empty and he never talked about what was bothering him because he usually avoided people. This worked for him because he was kind of antisocial and he let his problems fade away and all the pain, anger, and hurt got all built up. Jason had issues but he never got the help for it because he would just push them aside like nothing wrong. Sometimes he would take out all of his anger on his brother, though Jason didn't mean to, he did because he couldn’t really control it.
            His dad didn't know what Jason was dealing with. therefore, he could not help and it was great because Jason didn't want his help...he didn't want anyone's help. Jason eventually started slacking off so his grades dropped and his teachers sort of noticed. He would just go home everyday and go on the internet. Sometimes he would go to his friends house and hang out, he went there often actually. He is Jason's best friend and he is one of the coolest people you will ever meet. They go to school together and they have had some pretty interesting conversations. okay so eventually since Jason's teachers have noticed that his grades are dropping, they brought it to his attention. He was asked to wait after class for a few minutes in every one of his classes to talk about his grades. Now he didn't do his homework and he also stopped doing his classwork. Jason said to all of his teachers that he would stay after to get his grade up and he said he would start doing his homework. The teachers all said to him that he was a smart kid and they know he can do the work but Jason didn't believe that.
              Jason's mood was usually very depressing, it was unless his friends made him happy. he has very few friends that care enough to make him happy but he very much appreciates his friends that do care. Jason's life was very empty and he didn't feel complete so he would cry in his room, cry himself to sleep and sometimes he uttered a tear in school. He said to himself that he had nothing, he was poor and tried to be accepted as just normal and it worked but he still says he has nothing except his friends. Jason has been through a lot, more than people think and everyday is just another day closer we are to dying as he looks at it. But it is still remarkable that he gets up and goes to school everyday, Jason really has determination to do better its just he doesn't get help unless help comes to him.
               When his teachers came to him about his grades, he saw it as a window of hope to actually be something in life so he was really determined to bring his grades up and succeed and get out of high school on to college and from there to get the job that he really wants to get. One thing is he doesn't even know what he wants to do but he has time to look over possibilities.
                So Jason is determined to get all his missing work in, to higher his grade. He has the help of his teachers and his friends and family support and help him. His grades are F’s and some are D’s but he is going to get at least C’s in all of his classes, that’s his goal. Over time, Jason has stayed after school for help and to get his grades up and he has worked very hard. He’s putting the pieces together and his life is getting better. he doesn't need much more work to make up and his grades have gotten so much better. Almost all of Jason’s grades are C’s two are B’s and he is really happy and he is more positive now. His teachers have all noticed the change he made and they have seen how hard he has worked and they are all very proud of him.
                  Jason has made a huge change in his life and he made himself a promise, a promise to always work hard and do what needs to be done. I’m sure if more people knew that he made this change, they would be proud of him and maybe look up to him and it would give more people like Jason the idea to do what he has done. This was not an easy thing to do, it takes a lot to want something when you're like Jason, when he has almost given up on life and just decides to want to be something.
The End
psst...if you haven't really noticed, this is me but I just used another name and changed some things. I left out some people and some details just because I don't think its right to use peoples names without them knowing. The friend that goes to school with me is Zack Healy, he’s chill. i'm not very depressed, I am still depressed nonetheless. I actually want to get my grades up therefore i shall complete this essay. I hope you enjoy.
...Now It’s The End

6 comments:

  1. 1.a kid wants to change his life around
    2.he changes over time because he starts doing his homework
    3.my favorite part of the story was when it was over

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  2. 1.Was that Jason is very depressed and needs to get his grades up.
    2.Jason changes by his teachers helping him and staying after school.
    3.My favorite part of the story is when Jason gets his grades up and knows what hes gonna do with his life.
    4.The best quality is how the author explains stuff and uses good detail.
    5.School.

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  3. 1: Jasons grades are slipping
    2: Jason goes from being a good kid and having good grades to depressed and slacking off
    3: When he says They go to school together and they have had some pretty interesting conversations.
    4: The characters conflict
    5: Work hard, if ur down get back up
    6: Dialouge.

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  4. 1. Jason is sad and grades are slipping
    2. Goes from a good kid to slacking
    3. When I am in the story
    4. The conflict
    5. Jason is sad and needs help
    6. should add dialouge

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  5. 1. there was a depressed kid
    2. the main character is Jason
    3. my favorite part was when it was over.
    4. is that its short
    5. there is a kid that doesnt like school
    6.he needs to make the story longer,it needs more words it only has 863

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